Insomnia's Watch
Fighting Dinosaurs, on Mars (Outline/Synopsis) DRAFT 2.5
MAN (NAMED JOHN CARTER) GOES TO BAR
MAN GETS DRUNK
MAN MEETS WOMAN
MAN HAS SEX WITH WOMAN
MAN GETS WOMAN PREGNANT
MAN SHIRKS RESPONSIBILITY
MAN JOINS ARMY
ARMY SENDS MAN TO MARS
MAN REALIZES THAT HIS COMRADES ARE ALL NAMED JOHN CARTER
MAN ALSO REALIZES THAT HIS COMRADES ARE MORE “EXPENDABLE” THAN ELITE
REMEMBER THAT EPISODE OF CLASSIC TREK WHERE KIRK FIGHTS THE GORN? NOW IMAGINE THE GORN HAVING EXTRA ARMS AND GUNS.
MAN REALIZES THAT DINOSAUR MEN WITH GUNS ARE LIMITING HIS CHANCE OF SURVIVAL AS HE WATCHES HIS COMMANDER GET RIPPED IN HALF.
MAN ATTEMPTS TO GO AWOL.
MAN REALIZES THAT IT IS IMPOSSIBLE TO GO AWOL ON MARS, AS THERE IS NO ONE LIVING THERE EXCEPT THE “BARNEYS” (SLANG FOR THE DINOSAUR MEN).
MAN ACCEPTS HIS FATE AND REJOINS THE “JOHN CARTER BRIGADE” AS THEY ARE UNDER ATTACK FROM THE “BARNEYS”
MAN RALLIES THE TROOPS AND PUSHES THE ATTACK. REALIZING THAT HE IS STRONGER ON MARS THAN ON EARTH, HE ATTEMPTS TO ENGAGE THE “BARNEYS” IN CLOSE COMBAT.
THE “BARNEYS” SHOOT OUR HERO JOHN CARTER REPEATEDLY.
MAN FALLS IN BATTLE, WOUNDED BUT NOT DEAD.
THE OTHER JOHN CARTERS RALLY IN HIS NAME AND CHARGE FORWARD.
MAN NOTICES A BRIGHT LIGHT FILLING HIS VISION.
MAN SEES A VTOL TRANSPORT LAND BETWEEN THE JOHN CARTERS AND THE “BARNEYS.”
EXTREMELY WELL TONED ARMY COMMANDOS APPEAR FROM THE VTOL AND PROCEED TO ASSAULT THE “BARNEYS” WITH OBSCENELY DISPROPORTIONATE WEAPONRY.
THE “BARNEYS” DON'T STAND A CHANCE AGAINST THE WELL OILED MUSCLE BOUND COMMANDOS WHO ALL APPEAR TO BE CHOMPING AT OLD CIGARS AND YELLING ONE LINERS AT THE ENEMY.
JUST BEFORE THE LIGHTS GO OUT FOR MAN, ONE OF THE COMMANDOS APPEARS AND POURS A SEARING LIQUID ON HIS WOUNDS, HEALING HIM.
MEDIC COMMANDO DRAGS MAN TO THEIR LEADER
LEADER IS THE WOMAN THAT MAN GOT PREGNANT.
WOMAN IS A BAD ASS COVERT OPS COLONEL.
WOMAN SAYS THAT SHE WAS ANGRY AT THE MAN, AND SOUGHT REVENGE, BUT COULD NOT REMEMBER WHICH JOHN CARTER WAS THE CULPRIT, SO SHE SENT THEM ALL.
OTHER JOHN CARTERS ARE VISIBLY UPSET OVER THE DEVELOPMENT AND WISH TO PHYSICALLY BEAT THE MAN, BUT ARE RESTRAINED BY THE COMMANDOS
WOMAN SAYS SHE WAS WATCHING AND WAS IMPRESSED BY HIS COURAGE AND ACCEPTING RESPONSIBILITY FOR HIS MEN.
WOMAN OFFERS THE MAN A SECOND CHANCE.
MAN CAN COME BACK TO EARTH WITH HER AND GET A JOB AND BE A RESPONSIBLE FATHER OR HE CAN CONTINUE LEADING THE JOHN CARTERS ON ANOTHER SUICIDE MISSION ON MARS.
MAN IS VISIBLY UPSET THAT THE WOMAN HAS TESTED HIM BY PUTTING HIS LIFE ON THE LINE.
MAN ACCEPTS THE SUICIDE MISSION.
WOMAN HANDS HIM HIS ORDERS AND LEAVES WITH THE BAD ASS COMMANDOS.
OTHER JOHN CARTERS LOOK START TO ATTACK MAN
MAN DROPS HIS ORDERS IN THE SCUFFLE
MAN AND OTHER JOHN CARTERS HEAR A MIGHTY ROAR.
MAN AND THE OTHER JOHN CARTERS NOTICE THAT THERE ARE MORE “BARNEYS” THAN BEFORE.
“BARNEYS” CHARGE THE JOHN CARTERS
MAN AND OTHER JOHN CARTERS OPEN FIRE
ORDERS BLOW AWAY IN THE WIND UNREAD.
THE JOHN CARTERS ARE LAST SEEN MAKING A MIGHTY LAST STAND.
THE END?
Yes, I'm writing a story that takes place on a Mars similar to Edgar Rice Burroughs "John Carter of Mars" series. How much there is more, is yet to be seen. Maybe our John Carter will meet a nice red skinned girl and settle down. Or perhaps he will piss her and her people off, and we might move to Neptune. You should see the women on Neptune.